Saturday, October 8, 2011

Grim(ace)



Confined happiness,
dump in darkness,
just a deranged was she.
Redirected those winds,
close known no more,
secret words no more,
twinge in heart no more,
deep fear no more,
giving sides and moving on.
Though opposite but moving on,
silently moving on.
But Life moves in a circle,
opposite ends have to meet,
to tune with those old feet,
turning a blind eye,
known strangers,
restricted distance,
uncomfortable silence between them,
what else left ?
Time to last,
waiting for last words,
do call it final last.
when moving apart for miles.
Why not with smiles,
when overcoming the past,
and calling it final last,
then why not with slight tenderness.
For the sake of old good time,
bid me final goodbye with a SMILE :) 

20 comments:

RHYTHM AND RHYME said...

What a wonderful post, most uplifting on a dull Autumkn day,.
Thanks for sharing.
Yvonne.

the other side of me said...

awww...this is so nice..

For the sake of old good time,
bid me final goodbye with a SMILE :)

these are nice words..and I still remember how I bid goodbye with a smile too :)

Saru Singhal said...

The title is remarkable and the poem weaves a journey from negative to positive. Life comes in circle line is so apt to change the course of thought. The ending is super, couldn't be better. Beautifully crafted poem...
Saru

Rahul Bhatia said...

Such lovely poetry Reicha! Its like a whiff of fresh air!

Ashish Nandwani said...

just asking , opposite ends 'has'(have) to meet was anything intentional? I seem to connect with it at the start but then it started going in some directions , i could not relate to! That's poetry though , very specific and very general at times!

Ashish Nandwani said...

First of all reicha , thanks for sharing this. I almost understood what you wanted to say through your poem (earlier as well) , what i meant was that, reading first few lines of the poem , i did not expect that it will go in this direction. (so i could not connect with the last part of it). A specific write-up sometimes can be perceived very differently by everyone , May be i would have given a different title to it and made it into something else. But that's poetry , i admire the way u did write this one! hope i made myself clear! Cheers!

FirstTimeMother said...

@Yvonne --> thanks for your visit.

@Aleeya -->Thankyou. Smiles for you :)

@Saru --> The poem was completely directed towards darkness.I just tried to end it in a positive way.

@Rahul sir --> Thank you :)

@ashish --> Two people were together but things aren't working well between them any more..
She was an insane that she decided to continue it. "Redirected those winds" Finally she decided to leave and by this she ended the good(close known, shared secret words) and the bad part(twinge in heart,deep fear) too of that chapter from her life.
" Life moves in a circle"- Today she is standing at the same point from where she started her journey.
"opposite ends has to meet"-its ALWAYS the game of destiny(not the intentions of human being).
Now, when destiny wants to give them a second chance to be together, they don't feel comfortable with each other anymore."known strangers"..
So its time to last....

FirstTimeMother said...

@Ashish --> yep,Its all about one's perspective.
Its just that i don't like giving sad/negative endings so i tried to end up with a smile.

The Solitary Writer said...

Well Written and I do second Saru. Life does moves in a circle and opposite ends has to meet.

!Ste

FirstTimeMother said...

@ The Solitary Writer -->Welcome to my blog. Thanks for your words :)

Anonymous said...

nice poem...

FirstTimeMother said...

@krishna - thankyou !

@ashwimi - thanks dear. I have added google friend connect."You and I in this beautiful world" you need to refresh the page again :)

PhilO♥ said...

Bidding goodbye with a smile for the sake of the memories built :)

Lovely poem. I love your header. It's beautiful :)

Anjoo said...

"When moving apart for miles..
Why not with smiles" :) I just loved this line...I mean whole post was mind blowing and very deep.. :) keep writing..:) tc

CookieCrumbsInc. said...

"But Life moves in a circle,
opposite ends have to meet,"-
How true, that!

Lovely poetry, Madame:)

FirstTimeMother said...

@ ♫♪♥PhilO♥♪♫ --> thanks for your visit gal :)

@Anjoo --> Thank you.welcome to my blog.

@PeeVee --> Your comment makes me smile :) Thank you !

Amigo said...

known strangers,
restricted distance,
uncomfortable silence between them,
what else left ?
hmmmmm....Ahhhh!!!! amazingly beautiful Reicha!!!!!....

FirstTimeMother said...

Thanks Amigo. Good to see you back :)

Amigo said...

Hey Thanks Reicha! :)Some one telling "good to see you back"really sounds great for me!!means a lot to me!!

FirstTimeMother said...

Your welcome.. I always like your visit to my blog and your comments make me smile :)
Take care !!